For my literacy narrative, I addressed how I learned English through the help of my sponsors.
I need peer reviewers to look at the following:
* Are my incidents in my narrative appropriate?
* Do the incidents seem to go together?
* Do you get the point?
Manisha’s Portfolio 
The narrative seems un finished. I was intrigued then you left me on a cliff hanger.
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Your introduction seems to be missing a thesis. A thesis will pull everything together.
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Your narrative is very entertaining, I wanted to keep reading. you drew readers in.
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You seem to start a lot of your sentences with I. try ti change it up. sometimes a reader can get bored after reading the same thing over and over.
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You seem to start the a lot of sentences with I. Sometimes the reader can get bored when they hear the same thing over and over.
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Your literacy narrative is very good. You have a very interesting story. I loved how you expressed the hards that came with learning English.
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Something that you may want to explain more is when talking about your parents. Did it affect yourself or your siblings that they didn’t understand how to read or write.
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You did a really good job on explaining your background of reading and writing. Maybe you can give an example something you have written that was either easy or hard.
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Something else that you can do is talk about how either your parents, uncle or grandmother, is you sponsor. Maybe bring an idea for Writing about Writing. Would you consider them your sponsors or is it someone else like a teacher or friend?
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